III. Samples of Long Thesis Statements

The following are thesis statements by seniors in May 2002 for term papers they were drafting. These thesis statements are longer than most traditional ones, which are usually limited to a sentence. However, they are presented here to demonstrate how substantive and focused the thesis statements should be.

"Title IX has helped thousands of females be actively involved in sports. Without this, females would have never gotten a change to fulfill their potential, to gain self-esteem, and to achieve new opportunities for personal growth. However, even though Title IX seemed like a great law that would end sexual discrimination against women in sports, we are beginning to see that it is starting a new wave of discrimination against men."

- Michelle A.

"ACL surgery and therapy has changed throughout the years from very invasive to a simple surgery with easy rehabilition. The future of ACL surgery seems to be taking this process to even greater rapidity of recovery as the return to everyday life will occur more quickly through intense therapy."

- Sandra S.

"While computers in the past decades have led to a great employment boom, the future threatens a level of automation that may lead to dramatic shifts in the American workplace."

- Imran K.

"The future of the roller coaster seems to be one of transforming the position of the rider, pushing the limits of height and speed, and through space and virtual reality, distorting and expanding the possibilities of thrill rides."

- Brian G.

"Trade agreements between Mexico and the United States offer the great possibilities of larger markets but also fears that employment changes could hurt workers in both countries. With illegal immigration across the border a central problem, the relationship seems to be growing in both tension and in the special bonds of common goals, geography, and purpose."

- Farhan M.

"Scientists have been able to clone pigs by transplanting their organs into humans because the pig's anatomy is very similar to humans. The next step to pig cloning is to resolve problems with a virus, PERVs, which causes infection that might have the same effect on humans as on pigs and mice."

- Laura B.

"By giving over control of the Panama Canal to Panama, the U.S. has left the canal without military protection in an unstable region. In order to assure a workable, safe canal system in the future, the U.S. must protect the Panama Canal by its military. Without the aid of the U.S. military, control of the Panama Canal may fall into the wrong hands."

- Anshul S.

"With more carbon dioxide from automobiles polluting the environment, Hybrid Electric Vehicles are becoming a popular, cleaner alternative. The best chance for the Hybrid car to succeed is for major manufacturers to offer a combination of traditional power and reliability, along with the bonus of greater gas mileage."

- Nazia J.

"The twentieth century has brought about a changing status of the black athlete in the United States including coaching positions, executives positions, managers, and the players as well. The next important steps must be in the area of franchise ownership by blacks."

­ Sean H.

"In the past, eating disorders have been directly related to socioeconomic status, but lately eating disorders have been due to cultural factors. The expansion of eating disorders to westernized nations is drawing a series of new contradictory theories on what is at the source of eating disorders."

- Heather K.

"The future of genetic engineering and the Human Genome Project is very promising and exciting. However, individuals should not expect a cure for cancer or their own clone anytime soon. But the near future can offer an increased understanding of genetics and how genetic engineering could benefit mankind."

- Jason V.

"The Superstring Theory is a way for man to finally understand his world. As the theory is further explained, the ideas of this theory continue to expand, suggesting an overall scientific force that controls the basic structure of our world., such as other dimensions and new features of space and time."

- Daniel L.

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